That's it!
Shut it down!
Sorry HMB. Its not the art, its the story. Just have Daphne write you a RPG inspired story of this caliber and you'll win all the discussion boards.
I generally dislike fantasy-set erotic fiction because it violates the unwritten genre rule that you can only ask your audience to accept one crazy idea per installment. Once you've taken me to the future or a fantasy world that's it. I can't suddenly accept erotic mind control and breast expansion (even though such things would clearly be more possible in those settings) because I'm too busy wrapping my brain around this crazy new world.
But by having the action switch between these fantasy characters and their "real world" counterparts it undoes the craziness of the fantasy setting and allows me to accept the mind controlling dice and BE.
I like this idea so much I'm planning on shamelessly stealing it for my own stories.
Bottom line: Roll Playing is so good that I need to keep a jug of water near the computer to keep my fluid levels up and prevent dehydration.