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« Reply #15 on: January 19, 2017, 11:54:04 am » |
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Loved the storyline (and the art) but I'm slightly distracted because I can't work out why the second cover (at the end) is five years earlier than the first one (at the beginning). It shows the - er - remodelled girl so three months later would make sense; I suppose it could be a typo but then the cover price is lower, consistent with an earlier edition...
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« Reply #16 on: January 19, 2017, 11:54:51 am » |
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Loved the storyline (and the art) but I'm slightly distracted because I can't work out why the second cover (at the end) is five years earlier than the first one (at the beginning). It shows the - er - remodelled girl so three months later would make sense; I suppose it could be a typo but then the cover price is lower, consistent with an earlier edition...
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« Reply #17 on: January 19, 2017, 11:55:09 am » |
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Loved it. However, a few grammatical quibbles/errors:
Page 1: Big Boobs -> Big Boobed would read better on the magazine cover
Page 2: weight look -> weight loss
Page 5: see out -> seek out
By the by, lovely shades of pink Sturkwurk found for her lips and nails at the end there.
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« Reply #18 on: January 19, 2017, 12:28:40 pm » |
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Loved the storyline (and the art) but I'm slightly distracted because I can't work out why the second cover (at the end) is five years earlier than the first one (at the beginning). It shows the - er - remodelled girl so three months later would make sense; I suppose it could be a typo but then the cover price is lower, consistent with an earlier edition...
That picture was a bonus piece I did just for fun. |
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« Reply #19 on: January 19, 2017, 03:47:17 pm » |
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Have you seen the proofreading on those magazines? Ah. Going for authenticity then, are we? I'll allow it. |
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« Reply #20 on: January 19, 2017, 04:01:53 pm » |
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Have you seen the proofreading on those magazines? I can honestly say I have never read a magazine with a cover which looked like that. ;p |
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« Reply #21 on: January 19, 2017, 04:31:15 pm » |
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You know this discussion shows the desire for a sequel where the magazine helps people train their new bimbo to have a copy editor mode to help the magazine grow without impacting the budget.   Fun comic, btw. |
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« Reply #22 on: January 19, 2017, 05:33:41 pm » |
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Loved the storyline (and the art) but I'm slightly distracted because I can't work out why the second cover (at the end) is five years earlier than the first one (at the beginning). It shows the - er - remodelled girl so three months later would make sense; I suppose it could be a typo but then the cover price is lower, consistent with an earlier edition...
That picture was a bonus piece I did just for fun. Ah ha; a cunningly laid red herring then. Was it you in the recent Sherlock Holmes series playing Moriarty's ghost? Great art and detail, right up to the blonde hair highlights, for which I can forgive much! |
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« Reply #23 on: January 20, 2017, 08:11:30 am » |
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Loved the storyline (and the art) but I'm slightly distracted because I can't work out why the second cover (at the end) is five years earlier than the first one (at the beginning). It shows the - er - remodelled girl so three months later would make sense; I suppose it could be a typo but then the cover price is lower, consistent with an earlier edition...
That picture was a bonus piece I did just for fun. Ah ha; a cunningly laid red herring then. Was it you in the recent Sherlock Holmes series playing Moriarty's ghost? Great art and detail, right up to the blonde hair highlights, for which I can forgive much! I'm not clever enough to play Moriarty's shoelace, let alone his ghost. I just do my best for the artwork, I'm glad you liked it. |
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« Reply #24 on: January 21, 2017, 05:06:07 pm » |
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"Any lower back tattoo is queer / It might as well say 'Insert cock here'"
-- Stephen Lynch
TAKE THAT BACK! I Love Tramp Stamps, and shaved pussy. If I was President, it be the law of the land. I thought it was a cleaver cover. |
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