I think this is one of your best stories but I have to say I am a little disappointed with this issue. I get the sense that you are rushing the story. I think it would have been hot to include a slide with the manager smiling and telling Kayleigh what a good job she was doing and that she was getting a promotion (and perhaps other things).
I also think there are other sub plots that have not been fully developed such as Annie, the stuck up ex-girlfriend...and Karen, the girl that was supposed to do anything to get him in bed.
Maybe if you included a new issue every month ; )
I think he's got a point about the un-included sub-plots and forgotten characters. He suggests an issue every month, that would be good but I think another approach would be to make extra long issues every two or three months. These being something like twenty or more pages long, with the artists taking their time to build up the story over an extended period of time.
