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« on: March 26, 2022, 12:02:39 am » |
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Jim's wife has been having trouble sleeping. Fortunately, their good friend has just the remedy for this…  Script: Daphne • Art: Montalis • Lettering: George Zipp |
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knightrider007
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« Reply #1 on: March 30, 2022, 12:22:42 am » |
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Are these pages in the correct order? If so, it makes for a very disjointed read...
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grimtidings
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« Reply #2 on: March 30, 2022, 04:45:56 am » |
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Personally, I think it's to cover for the continuity error regarding the living room furniture.
12, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11 is my guess.
I, also, would have preferred standard chronology. Flashbacks/shuffle-time should be sprinkles and not core - but that's just my opinion.
Most-likely I'm not actually in the target audience as I also sigh at the poor woman's chest size (insert the usual joke about "too small" here) - I wince at the thought of her back pain and how tense she'd have to keep herself just to keep from tipping over like an upside-down pear. Oh, and the husband alright with the cucking thing is meh (in some circumstances I can enjoy that concept but it requires character development and stakes to give it context and weight... this couple's just a pair of paper dolls).
Art style's nice, though. Montalis meets Maxx? It's brighter than Checkered Past.
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arm7man88
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« Reply #3 on: March 30, 2022, 04:47:30 am » |
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I like the ordering, it a way to change things up, also this is one of my favorite one shots.
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madboy7931
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« Reply #4 on: March 30, 2022, 01:07:15 pm » |
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Really enjoyed that. I like that the husband was also under his power. I like men being under control now and again, but would be hotter if its a woman controlling it  |
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knightrider007
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« Reply #5 on: March 30, 2022, 09:22:53 pm » |
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Personally, I think it's to cover for the continuity error regarding the living room furniture.
12, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11 is my guess.
I think it's actually 3-9-5-7 (all the rest I agree). It makes for an abrupt transition from fellatio to mating press (3->9), but then the position remains consistent from 9->5 (so 5 is *after* the first, frenzied orgasm, hence the sweat), and the transition to doggy 5->7 matches the dialogue of "How would you like me now"/"From behind", with the tranced fade-out at the end of 7 leading to the transition to post-sex dressed scene. I agree with you re: breast size. Nice perky Cs or Ds are MORE than enough, thank you... |
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« Reply #6 on: March 30, 2022, 09:29:42 pm » |
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Wow, the sequel to Chaperone came fast.
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Daphne
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« Reply #7 on: March 30, 2022, 09:30:23 pm » |
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Wow, the sequel to Chaperone came fast.
It's kind of weird how things like that work out. It wasn't planned, except that kind of what I'm into does run in cycles. |
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grimtidings
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« Reply #8 on: April 01, 2022, 09:43:29 pm » |
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Personally, I think it's to cover for the continuity error regarding the living room furniture.
12, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11 is my guess.
I think it's actually 3-9-5-7 (all the rest I agree). It makes for an abrupt transition from fellatio to mating press (3->9), but then the position remains consistent from 9->5 (so 5 is *after* the first, frenzied orgasm, hence the sweat), and the transition to doggy 5->7 matches the dialogue of "How would you like me now"/"From behind", with the tranced fade-out at the end of 7 leading to the transition to post-sex dressed scene. I agree with you re: breast size. Nice perky Cs or Ds are MORE than enough, thank you... And I concur on the page sequence - 9 does make sense before 5! |
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« Reply #9 on: April 02, 2022, 09:40:41 am » |
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Chaperone? Is that a story somewhere?
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« Reply #11 on: April 03, 2022, 03:19:18 pm » |
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It would be really awesome if this gets adapted to an MCT film.
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« Reply #12 on: April 05, 2022, 01:03:52 am » |
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Super hot story and montalis has great art as usual.
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« Reply #13 on: April 06, 2022, 01:25:51 am » |
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It would be really awesome if this gets adapted to an MCT film.
Absolutely!!! |
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Daphne
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« Reply #14 on: July 03, 2022, 05:48:23 pm » |
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For the record, the official order of the pages (in story time) is: 12, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2, 1, 3, 5, 7, 9, 11.
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