Mind Control Comics Forum

For the moment, you can't "favorite" Starter Marriage, because of boring technical reasons. So, we're collecting some feedback! If you've played it, what did you think of it? Worth doing others of this type?

I love CYOA multi-path stories, and there really aren't a whole lot of ones for MC fiction, so this is awesome. That said, this current one felt like a lot of setup with little MC. That's ok, but it's also ok to have other ones be more quick-start/red-meat.

It was one of the most interesting things on the site in a long time. I'd love to see more of these if they're given the same amount of thought and care. And, of course, I'm very interested in what happens next.

A big thing for me is that I think I like the text/art ratio of this better than most of your comics - Sturk's work is about the same. Most of us came to this kink from the erotic fiction community, I'd guess, so we're already text-oriented more than most (and probably especially most men.) As Oglaf put it, I need a convoluted narrative to really get off (https://www.oglaf.com/shiptoship/3/). And there's nothing more convoluted than a multi-path story or whatever you want to call it.

That's a really interesting thought, but I'm not convinced it's accurate. I'd actually guess that the younger you are, the less true this is.

I agree with the second part of that, certainly.

I personally find the multi path story to be a fun change of pace.  It feels a lot like a VN of sorts. I've so far triggered around 3 different variants of endings through Ch. 2, I'd assume for your sanity that while user choice is important you only have a certain number of endings planned? Say 5 or 6 with variables changing depending on the reader choice. Like there's clearly an Allison wife style ending, but whether she has gotten implants, is submissive, has a blowjob fetish etc being the variables? Not intending to ask for spoilers. I'm also curious if this will be a monthly release, or longer due to its complexity?

It'd be amazing if this was monthly.

Implants would be nice, but some kind of body modification to go along with the mind control would be even better.

This was really nice, and I played through it dozens of time to get the various different outcomes. I've enjoyed it quite a lot but obviously the first installment leaves for little payoff, especially in the ways of mind control. I would love of this would become a monthly thing, but I imagine the work load would grow non-linearly.

There are some choices that do not feel meaningful in any way, in the interactions by text with the ex. It's not clear if it is intentional, but it feels bad. It feels as she'll feel roughly the same no matter what I say.

I don't mind CYOA, but I was not a fan of the story. Two chapters in and there's still no mind control.

It's pretty heavily hinted at, but it's not explicitly that.

Once I found out how to go back and try different paths, I liked the story.  And the art is fantastic.  And if you don't think there's already mind control in those two chapters, go back and look at a couple more paths.

Very neat!

I give it a good to great out of 11

One thing I'd like, now that I've played the game a few times, is some indication of how many possible states there are at certain nodes, e.g. at the end of each chapter. I've found 4 different endings to chapter 2, but I have no idea if that's anything like all there are. I've not kept close track, and I really don't want to spend a lot of effort to further investigate; is there any way to get an idea of how many paths there are through any given node?

End one branch but was bad start. wait so I can do restart

Yeah, it'd also be nice to catalogue how to get certain results. I know I've gotten a few different comments for what Allison says at the end of the day, but I don't have a perfect memory and haven't been able to recreate them all.

Also, small thing, but: for those of us who want to replay this multiple times, it's annoying to have to wait for the "three loads" (text, then image, then options) when we're just trying to blast through to a certain alternate choice.

I feel like we're all criticizing this thing now, but it's only because we like it!

I'm not sure I know how many variations there are on some scenes! Easy over 60, in some cases.

String, thumbtacks, and an empty wall. Problem solved. Sure, your friends will think you're a lunatic, but  who needs friends, right?

RIGHT?

I liked it, but I'm afraid that it won't have an end.  Or endings.  Most of the series on MC Comics go on forever, which is fine.  "The Hidden Knowledge" will get updated once a year and never end and that's fine.  But a CYOA story really really does need endings.

But that's being negative.  So far, I like it.

This is true; in particular, it does.

Yep. Nothing lasts forever, even cold November rain.

I think my only real complaint is that the animated text transitions kind of make repeated run throughs a chore since you have to go back to chapter check points and can't just go back one choice.

I wondered about that. I noted that a lot of the scene text has small inserts and deletions depending on my choices, so I can see how you'd accomplish that.

Sad to be right about this.

We're working on it! These are complex updates…