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Title: Being Present Post by: Daphne on July 13, 2018, 10:08:05 am Priti comes home with Christian… but why? Christian's wife is her *boss*!
(https://mindcontrolcomics.com/comics/images/being_present/i01/being_present-i01-p00.jpg) (https://mindcontrolcomics.com/comics/being_present/i01/preview) Title: Re: Being Present Post by: Dr. White on July 16, 2018, 10:37:41 pm Title: Re: Being Present Post by: lifmcs on July 25, 2018, 02:04:07 am There's always someone bigger and *ahem* blonder...
If I were to nitpick, I'd say something more could have been done with the title in the mind fuckery itself. Is a great title, but I only see one level of punery in play. I have faith that Daphne can do better! Also... why are there paw prints on her sweater kittens ??? That's like, an ouroboros of metaphor. A nice range of great facial expressions in this. Good job, you two. Title: Re: Being Present Post by: robbie73_ on July 25, 2018, 08:18:50 am ;D ;D ;DLiked it, but I think I would like to see who wife brings her husband next year!!
Maybe show just how she conditions his next slave while working at the office, just a thought for a sequel to this one shot comic, great art work as usual. Title: Re: Being Present Post by: sturkwurk on July 25, 2018, 09:27:20 am If I were to nitpick, I'd say something more could have been done with the title in the mind fuckery itself. Is a great title, but I only see one level of punery in play. I have faith that Daphne can do better! Siobhan's anniversary present is a living being. and Priti isn't present in her state of mind, or being Title: Re: Being Present Post by: lifmcs on July 25, 2018, 12:17:36 pm If I were to nitpick, I'd say something more could have been done with the title in the mind fuckery itself. Is a great title, but I only see one level of punery in play. I have faith that Daphne can do better! Siobhan's anniversary present is a living being. and Priti isn't present in her state of mind, or being Second one, yes, she isn't 'present' or in a right frame of mind, which is the other pun I was thinking of. That aspect didn't really play into the dialog or apparent suggestions though, is what I was getting at. Maybe something like, "Is Priti present right now?" "No, Mistress..." "Is Priti a present right now?" "Mmmm... Yes, Mistress!" but I'll admit that exchange is a little heavy handed. There was nothing special in this story that put an added spin on Priti having left the building, mentally speaking, thus no longer 'being present'. Edit: Title: Re: Being Present Post by: hereno on July 25, 2018, 01:02:43 pm The number of people named Siobhan in the Daphneverse is hugely disproportionate to the actualverse.
Title: Re: Being Present Post by: sturkwurk on July 25, 2018, 02:58:35 pm I should note that my takes on the title were just my own, not something that Daphne told me.
Title: Re: Being Present Post by: GodWilling on July 26, 2018, 10:25:50 am .
Title: Re: Being Present Post by: bigwad73 on July 26, 2018, 04:32:25 pm The number of people named Siobhan in the Daphneverse is hugely disproportionate to the actualverse. This probably depends on which part of the actualverse you're in. But also bear in mind that the Daphneverse was based upon the Bananaramadiorama. Say what? (https://www.telegraph.co.uk/content/dam/music/Bananarama2.jpg) Title: Re: Being Present Post by: stiggle on July 26, 2018, 08:00:05 pm Always preferred Sara to Siobhan.
Title: Re: Being Present Post by: robbie73_ on July 28, 2018, 06:54:55 pm ;) ;) ;)Waiting to see just WHO Shoiban will bring home for Christian to play with along with his wife!!
Title: Re: Being Present Post by: GodWilling on July 29, 2018, 07:50:28 am .
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